So I have taken this about as far as I know how and now need to get some new eyes on it. Any notes or suggestions you would be willing to provide would be AWESOME!
Thanks for your time in advance.
EDIT:
So I have made some changes based on feedback from my peers. Two major ones i that I offset the dialogue forward by 2 frames. I have heard that can help with reading the lipsync.
I have also added about 1.5 seconds to the end. A big note I got from people was that it cut off right when it was getting good so I wanted to add a second or two to kind of milk the ending. Let me know if you think that is a good plan and I will animate another 50ish frames!
New:
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/36870016/Polish%20v4.mp4
Old:
Dropbox:
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/36870016/Fear%20Final%20Tiny.mov
Youtube:
Woo hoo!
Hi Brandon,
ReplyDeleteSorry for taking so long to get back to you on this. The shot is looking really good and the polish is coming along well. I like the addition of the extra time to the end. I don't know how much it's changed since the last time you showed in in class, but I'm feeling now like her body movements are too big. It feels more like she's sawing wood instead of washing dishes; I would keep her movements smaller and more tense. Some other assorted notes:
- Try building up more tension in her mouth at the beginning before she speaks
- The head animation on "afraid of" feels a bit rubbery and 'animationy'. Simplify arc pattern and back off the squash/stretch
- At the very end, instead of having her stay focused on the knife, it might be cool if her eyes flicked upward slightly, as if she's imagining what she might do with that knife. Personally I feel the final smile is a bit too diabolical, as if she's already relishing the violence. She seems very ready to do it. I think it would be more interesting if she had never considered violence before, and how does this new idea play out in her mind? Just a matter of taste - go with what feels right/interesting to you.
- It would be nice to have a bit of a dish come into the bottom of frame as she's washing, just so we're absolutely clear what she's doing.
- her look towards him on "you have" needs more attitude. Seems too neutral. Let some anger and tension come into her brows so that you get a bigger change when they relax.
- at the head of the shot it looks like her body was doing nothing, waiting for the "action!" cue. Have her finish doing another dish for the first 12 frames
Great stuff!
No problem on the late reply. Super grateful you took the time. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the input, I will try and get these in if I can (fighting against a deadline, haha).
Super appreciated!
Brandon